Here’s an IELTS general writing task essay submitted by a student. One of our expert trainers has evaluated it and submitted a model answer for it. The question as appeared in IELTS writing task 1/ 2 cue card is given below.
IELTS Writing Task 1/ 2 Question
Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening?
What can, and do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?
Student’s Essay
It is certainly true that the amount of garbage produced by us increasingly day by day. After providing careful analysis on why this problem rice so sharply in the country, I shall suggest some ways to tackle the problem.
This is one of the serious environmental evil, which is threatening our biosphere as well. There are many reasons which are to be blamed for it. The first main reason is inadequate disposable and recycling system of garbage in our country. Therefore, people throw their rubbish anywhere in the streets.
यह भी पढ़ें: एक विशेषज्ञ द्वारा आईईएलटीएस लेखन कार्य निबंध मूल्यांकन: अपने लेखन स्कोर में सुधार करने के लिए गाइड
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Moreover, the manufacturing and utilization of plastic disposable crockery, Thermcol crockery have enhanced the
However, the problem can be looked after by several precautionary measures. The first and foremost solution is to installing the proper system to dump the garbage everywhere. Moreover, the government should employ more people in this work to make a constant collection of garbage instantly. Furthermore, The government should impose some strict rules regarding throwing waste like foreign countries. For instance, the government of Dubai, USA, Australia etc. have already prohibited to discard the
litter anywhere. They have also installed a proper system for recycling and decomposing the non-recycling waste. To make an awareness in our country, even a big campaign has started by PM of India, Narender Modi. He is spreading awareness and motivating people by involving himself in the cleaning work.
Wrapping it Up
To conclude, although there are several legitimate concerns regarding it. If the above-mentioned step taken into consideration, none seem untackled.
Error Marked in Essay
It is certainly true that the amount of garbage is produced by us is increasing day by day. After providing careful analysis on why this problem has risen rice so sharply in the country, I shall suggest some ways to tackle the problem.
It is certainly true that the amount of garbage is produced by us is increasing day by day. After providing careful analysis on why this problem has risen rice so sharply in the country, I shall suggest some ways to tackle the problem.
अनुच्छेद तोड़ो
Moreover, the manufacturing and utilization of plastic and Thermcol disposable crockery, and Thermocol moreover, the manufacturing and utilization of plastic disposable crockery and Thermocol have enhanced the problem of quantity of waste material.
For instance, we generally experience the see huge piles collection of used plastic plates and glasses, thrown crockery on the roads especially on the occasion of festivals, religious events like langars etc. People are not aware of the importance and benefits of cleanliness around them.
ये भी पढ़ें: नमूना उत्तर के साथ आईईएलटीएस लेखन कार्य मूल्यांकन: बेहतर बैंड स्कोर के लिए एक गाइड
अनुच्छेद तोड़ो
However, the problem can be solved looked after by several precautionary measures. The first and foremost solution is to install the proper system to dump the garbage, everywhere. Moreover, The government should employ more people in this work to make a constant collection of garbage instantly.
Furthermore, The government should impose some strict rules regarding throwing waste like in foreign countries. For instance, the government of Dubai, USA, Australia etc. Have already prohibited to discard the litter everywhere.anyway. They have also installed a proper system for recycling and deep decomposing the non-recycling waste.
अनुच्छेद तोड़ो
To make people aware in our country, even a big campaign has been started by PM, Narender Modi To make an awareness in our country, even a big campaign has started by PM of India, Narender Modi. He is spreading awareness and motivation among people by getting involved in himself in the cleaning work.
Add Conclusion
To conclude, although there are several legitimate concerns regarding it. If the above-mentioned steps are taken into consideration by the government and individuals then the problem can be solved and tackled. ,. none seem untackled. Concerns regarding it. If the above-mentioned step is taken into consideration, none seem antiquated.
Essay Evaluation as done in IELTS Writing Task 1/ 2
उद्देश्य- बैंड 6
Has addressed the main ideas of the topic but not substantiated enough.
The essay has an introduction and conclusion but has not been divided into adequate paragraphs.
The essay has an adequate number of words.
सुसंगति- 5
Has presented information with some organisation but it lacks overall progression.
Makes an inaccurate use of cohesive devices.
उदाहरण:
The Student has written:
To conclude, although there are several legitimate concerns regarding it. If the above-mentioned step taken into consideration, none seem untackled.
It should be:
To conclude, although there are several legitimate concerns regarding it. If the above-mentioned steps are taken into consideration by the government and individuals then the problem can be solved and tackled. .. none seem untackled. Concerns regarding it. If the above-mentioned step is taken into consideration, none seem antiquated.
Grammar: 5
Makes frequent grammatical and spelling errors which
can cause some difficulty for the reader in understanding what is being conveyed.
उदाहरण:
The student has written:
It is certainly true that amount of garbage produced by us increasingly day by day. After providing careful analysis on why this problem rice so sharply in the country, I shall suggest some ways to tackle the problem.
It should be:
It is certainly true that the amount of garbage produced by us is increasing day by day. After providing a careful analysis of why this problem has risen rice so sharply in the country, I shall suggest some ways to tackle the problem.
Vocabulary: 5
Has not used apt vocabulary or synonyms suitable to the text.
For example: ‘deep composing’ should be ‘decomposing’. ‘ disposable’ should be ‘disposal’.
Model Essay as it Should be in IELTS Writing Task
In this modern and industrialised world, an excessive amount of waste is being produced by people everywhere. There has been a significant rise in population, globally, due to which consumption has increased and so has the waste. In this essay, we will discuss some reasons and solutions to this problem.
अनुच्छेद तोड़ो
With consumerism on the rise, there is a lot of competition amongst producers and manufacturers and the endeavour is to make the packaging of their products look. So, very attractive and colourful. Many foods,beverage etc. are packed in plastic containers which are non-biodegradable and have an adverse effect on the environment. Nowadays, in religious ceremonies and other get-togethers, people are using disposable cutlery and crockery which, at times cannot be recycled. There is also a lot of hardware junk from old computers etc. So, that is being thrown into the sea, thus harming and polluting marine life.
अनुच्छेद तोड़ो
Individuals and government have to work hand in hand to tackle this serious issue.There should be garbage bins and a proper recycling disposal system in place. The government should educate its citizens regarding the usage of reusable bags. Also, segregating the garbage produced in the households and should ban the use of plastic. Shopkeepers should give the stuff in reusable bags. So, for example, many malls in India are giving customers their things in paper bags. Schools and colleges should teach the children to “Go Green”.
Wrap it Up
To conclude, this problem needs to be addressed immediately before its too late. So, every individual has to take interest and responsibility in saving our planet from further degradation.
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