For effectively writing an IELTS writing task 2 essay, it is important that you respond well, aligning yourself well with the assessment criteria because you may be penalized for many reasons. Writing less than 250 words, responding irrelevantly with the topic, lacking examples to support ideas, grammatical errors, punctuation errors etc. are some of the likely reasons that can lead to lowered band score. Let’s now attempt the below IELTS writing task 2.
Some people say that giving a smaller amount of money weekly to children will help them become more capable as they grow older. Do you agree or disagree?
A group of people in the society believes that if children are given some amount of money on a weekly basis, they become more serious towards knowing the importance of money. While this is true, giving money every week is not appropriate and it should actually be restricted on a need basis.
To commence with, many parents think that they should pay their children on a regular basis. One of the possible reasons is that giving some amount of money to kids makes them responsible. It gives them the feeling that they have been assigned some money for a reason and if they do something good, for example, cleaning their study table, they would get paid. Apart from this, withholding some money in their pockets, kids can try to effectively manage it for various needs such as buying a notebook or a chocolate. Depending upon their needs only, they would spend their money.
On the other hand, there are some negative consequences of this approach. Many children would find it too easy to get money every week rather than on need basis. So, they would actually be spending more and asking for more money from their parents, in return. Secondly, this approach may affect their thinking about money as they may exceedingly give importance to money rather than other good things such as honesty, kindness, and trustworthiness. For instance, a kid who is receiving $10 every week would feel that money is the most important thing with which he can buy anything.
Overall, though some people think that children will get a better idea of spending money efficiently as they grow older, I disagree with this statement and feel that children should be given less amount of money and on a need basis rather than weekly basis.
You may observe how the following words or phrases have been used in the above IELTS writing task 2 response:
- For instance
- To commence with
- One of the possible reasons
- Apart from this
- On the other hand